Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

It is undeniable that te that having a job can be enjoyable for every person. Some people think that if they work only three days a week for long hours, they can do their best of themselves. However, I believe working shorter hours five days a week is the best idea. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be explored in the following.
First and foremost, working compactly can cause fatigue and lessen efficiency. It means when people try to work for long hours in three days, they do not have enough rest and they feel tired physically and mentally. The body needs to have enough relaxation that can have suitable effective work. I read a publication about the result of doing compact work on people. They chose two groups of people that one of them works long hours three days a week-they called the first group- and the other group was persons who work five days a week for the shorter hours-second group. The results of this experiment showed the members of the second group had better efficiency than the first group. They had minimum errors in their work. Also, they did not be tired when they came to their work. Although the first group came to their work only three days, they had fatigued a lot and their work had many errors. Because they stand a lot of pressure in three days. Finally, this experiment demonstrates working more days a week for shorter hours can be better.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that intervals between doing things can cause losing concentration. The most important question is what the relation is between working three days a week and concentration. You can assume a person who works three days a week and the rest of the week stays away from what he has been doing. When he comes back to his work after four days, he needs more time to remember what he did before. In this situation, he cannot focus on his work and usually has more faults rather than a person who works continuously during a week. Totally, if a person wants to work with more concentration and low errors, he or she should work shorter hours during a week, continuously.
To wrap it up, I strongly believe that doing a job five days a week for shorter hours is the best idea. This is because people have lower fatigue and more concentration to do their duties the best.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 902, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d a lot and their work had many errors. Because they stand a lot of pressure in three d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5584725537 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38928254089 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448687350835 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4446626142 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0434782609 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2173913043 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26086956522 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421936101108 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135962757022 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963386583577 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285372639766 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293497988699 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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