Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Nowadays, movies and television shows play an important role in people's daily life. Young people spend lots of time watching them. From my perspective, they have more positive effects than passive effects on the way teenagers behave.
First, youth can learn some significant examples which are good for their behaviors from movies and television. As we know, young people like to pursue celebrities. If these stars devote themselves to the charities, teenagers are more likely to do the same things as celebrities. For example, there was a huge earthquake happened in Sichuan in 2008 and hundreds of people got injured. When this happened, Jay chou who is a famous singer in China donated 100 thousand dollars. I am a big fan of him. Thus, when I saw this news on TV, I was extremely impressed. I also donated 500 dollars to Sichuan at once. Moreover, I have learned that I should help others when they are in trouble and I will feel so happy because of that. Therefore, films and TV programs have more positive impacts about teenagers' behaviors rather than negative impacts.
Second, there are a number of successful life stories in the movies and TV programs. Teenagers will behave well after seeing these incredible stories because they also want to success in the future. There are plenty of educational shows on TV such as speeches given by some great businessmen. In this way, young people can know a lot about how to be polite with others and how to behave appropriately in a dinner party. As time goes by, youth remember these good behaviors and put them into actions in the real life, which will benefit them in their future career. Thus, young people are able to gain much more positive effects about their behaviors than passive effects.
As the reasons mentioned above, it is clear to draw the conclusion that young people can benefit more from the movies and television than gain passive impacts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88685015291 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51098457454 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56880733945 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9297435888 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.35 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291117873567 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077244475775 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954900181928 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205719221297 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979858714705 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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