Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As the technology advancing, cost of manufacturing and broadcasting drop significantly. Television is a standard equipment in everyone's house. Movies are easily accessible to general public compared to the 17th centuries. Personally, I agree that movies and television have more negative effects on young behave. The following article will explore the reasons of why.
First of all, materialism is the last thing that young adult would need to learn and desire. However, tv programs and movies usually praise materialism a lots in the plot. It is common to see characters in the movies usually live with a luxurious style. For example, in the TV series which portrait life of professional football players, the main character usually drives fancy sports car and discards one immediately whenever there is a little scratch on it. They would have luxurious parties and enjoying expensive meal on a huge yacht every night. Teenager would easily be affected by what they see unconsciously even though they usually do not admit it. Consequently, they would try to be live a life which young adults are not able to achieve, living with a distorted value.
Besides, as history has proved that broadcasting tools are effective weapons to create conflicts among the society. Nowadays, tv program or talk show is gradually becoming a tool for political propaganda which would be harmful to young adults who need role model to grow up with. For instance, during the period of elections, scene of politicians attacking each other not only verbally but also physically happen everyday. Scandals are broadcasting on the news channels as the headline title every 1 minutes. For young adults, it's challenging not to notice and be affected by those violence showing everywhere. Worst of all, they might start to mimic those insulting or attacking behaviors in daily life.
Finally, the plots of movies and television are usually too good to be true which would have negative effects on how young adult recognize the realities. Movies and television are produced to make profit for medial companies so they would create unrealistic scene or plot to attract audience. Being bombarded by unreal contents for a long time, young adults could easily dissociated with the reality. Moreover, they would even addicted to it and behave in an unusual way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'standard equipment'.
Suggestion: standard equipment
...sting drop significantly. Television is a standard equipment in everyones house. Movies are easily a...
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Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... house. Movies are easily accessible to general public compared to the 17th centuries. Persona...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...s and movies usually praise materialism a lots in the plot. It is common to see charac...
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Line 9, column 414, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...nly verbally but also physically happen everyday. Scandals are broadcasting on the news ...
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Line 9, column 577, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this violence' or 'those violences'?
Suggestion: this violence; those violences
...enging not to notice and be affected by those violence showing everywhere. Worst of all, they ...
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Line 13, column 372, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'dissociate'
Suggestion: dissociate
... a long time, young adults could easily dissociated with the reality. Moreover, they would ...
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Line 13, column 428, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'addict'
Suggestion: addict
... the reality. Moreover, they would even addicted to it and behave in an unusual way.
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Line 13, column 454, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unusual way" with adverb for "unusual"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ey would even addicted to it and behave in an unusual way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19841269841 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77384074738 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9600616387 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3181818182 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178020924385 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580905290325 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929563891217 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131807330073 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871760289074 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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