Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The young generations are the hope and aspiration of a future nation. This nation's future can be very much affected by the various influence of the modern technology and also by drug addiction.However ,I personally befieve that television have more negetive outcome to the young generation than good.

First of all,to entertain the consumers the television pregrame s auch as movies and serials are introducing advanture and thrills.In those thrills there are many plot that influc=ence the young generation to involve in crime.Foer example-In many movie scene the director show rape scene to make the movie more real to the spetator.But when the young generation see those sineries they have had a very negetive impact.Sone of them are influence by the incident and try to practice those same process to the crime .Thus those violence scene influence the younger generation to addicted to the crime.

Secondly,movies and television have shown progrrame of verious culture.This may also hamper the young generation and overall effect the perticular cultural value of the native.For example,in our country we the muslims practice the muslims culture but when the Tv are introduce to the society the people are perticularly the young generation's behaviour change dramatically.They use to the poop songs which are not an elaments of our culture,they atart to wear three quarter and t-shirt and have a head phone like the weatern and their bevioural pattern also change to the older which is also a reason to concern .Overall,their change is think as a culture threat to our country.

In conclusion,I am totally agree with the author point.our television director should be alert to make flim which should teach sometion good to the young generatiion and also improve the cultural beauty to them.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32986111111 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97597601741 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559027777778 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.1344086022 283% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 237.091206079 48.9658058833 484% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 307.0 100.406767564 306% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.6 20.6045352989 280% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.0 5.45110844103 367% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.5376344086 524% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156472507834 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797380906114 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0214068981444 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889864188476 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00889744475313 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.5 11.7677419355 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.16 58.1214874552 9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 6.10430107527 260% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 10.1575268817 263% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.01818996416 131% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.0537634409 247% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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