Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-worker — than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that appropriate teaching techniques and experience are very essential in transmitting information and skills to others. Actually, communicating and being a leader are the most crucial skill to be successful in the future. In my opinion, I agree with the people should study a higher level to increase a chance and achievement in the future and I have three common reasons for supporting my viewpoint as follows: all knowledge related with together, additional opportunity in the future.
Firstly, not only working in the companies but also studying at the school all knowledge relate with each other. For example, Steve Job, who found the Apple company selling about computers and innovative technology products, has ever studied about designing the creative logo of advertising products. He brings their knowledge from designing the logo to become his products by his logo to be an apple meaning about easy and no complex when customers use it. Although his logo looks like to be simple and easy, it has more powerful effects to create the new attitude and perspective of all customers.
Secondly, having several knowledge and skills can encourage people to increase a chance in the achievement including learning in the university and working in the real-life. For instance, a good teacher should not teach only academic lessons but also moral to students so as to apply their lives in the social. Nowadays, some students try to concentrate only academic knowledge to enroll a famous university by cheating in the examination as a result they failed and depressed forever their life.
All in all, as I discuss above, I can safely draw the conclusion that people should study more than own level to use it to adaptive life in the future because they cannot regulate or prognosticate everything in the future, so they ought to ready for future to be successful in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some knowledge'.
Suggestion: some knowledge
... of all customers. Secondly, having several knowledge and skills can encourage people to incr...
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...emic lessons but also moral to students so as to apply their lives in the social. Nowada...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10476190476 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8143461439 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568253968254 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.424582069 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.181818182 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7272727273 5.45110844103 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114602835482 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392259938092 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362315488703 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671817896806 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013764648223 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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