Life has changed over the past few decades and people have started to ask whether they buy products because they need them or because others have them. Personally, I think most people tend to buy products either because they are trendy or because a lot of people has the item. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
People want to feel that they are equal with others. If someone has a luxury item, others want to have the same. My experience is a good compelling example. When I was in college, my close friends had the most expensive phone which was iPhone 4. However, my phone was really old and I felt that I was imperfect. So, even though I did not have the money, I ask my father to buy for me a new phone similar to my friends. As you can see, I bought the phone not because I needed it, but because other people had it.
In addition, the companies start to update the products regularly and that attract people to buy more. Even though the changing is little, but the marketing tends to make it a lot. For instance, every year people wait for Apple conference in order to see the new iPhone. When you see the difference you between the versions, you see that the changing are in the quality of the camera, the appearance, and battery life. Unfortunately, because of the marketing, people buy the products, and communities start to do the same.
Frankly speaking, when people grow they realize that these companies manipulate them. So, you can see that a lot of elderly use the old versions. In last Christmas, I bought iPhone X for my father. He does not use yet. He told me that his phone is fine. I am sure that a lot of parents are the same.
All in all, I strongly believe that a lot of people buy products only because people have them. This is because that they want to be trendy as others and because the companies utilize this by updating their products annually.
- TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- TPO 35- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Nowadays, many movies or films are based on books. Some people prefer to read the original book before they watch the movie, other prefer to watch the movie before reading the book. Which one do you prefer? 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, frankly, however, if, really, so, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43820224719 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36578230047 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474719101124 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2722338248 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.6956521739 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4782608696 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45326779747 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116639265405 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133972229704 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271416320352 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143774624988 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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