Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today we live in the world of technology where we see new innovations in every field of our lives. Specially technology have changed children’s lives in every aspect. Our children are busy all the time using mobile phones and computers to play video games. In my opinion playing computer games for limited hours is not a waste of time and children should have persmission to play video games for a couple of hours every day because it can improve their mental ability, feeling of enjoyment, and working hard for achieving certain goal..
First of all, playing computer games for a couple of hours everyday can improve children’s mental ability to resolve things. Researchers have done a study to prove this also.They divided children into two groups. One group allowed to play video games everyday for 1-2 hours, while the other group was not allowed. After a few months, they found out that children who were playing video games were achieving good grades in their school as compared to the other group of pupils who were not. So I think children should play video games for certain hours, but not all the time.
Second, playing video games can create feeling of enjoyment and happiness in children. I have seen so many kids when they are crying for certain things and if their mother give them laptop or phone to play a video game, their mood changes right away. They seem very happy while playing games. Best example is my nephew who is five years old. Whenever my sister starts to do her household work, he gets annoyed and do not let her do anything. But, if my sister turn on video game on a computer and let him play for a while he gets excited and busy playing and my sister can finish all her work while he is having fun by his own.
Finally, by playing video games, children can learn how to work hard to achieve something. There are a lot of video games these days in which a child have to work hard to win something in the game. Like sports games. For example if a child is playing a basketball game in a computer and he/she will be a player who has to win the game. Naturally, he/she will start working hard to win the game. After winning a game he/she will learn that for getting something in life he/she has to work hard.
In conclusion, playing too much video games is not good for a child. However, children can play a couple of hours of video games because this can improve their mental level, can create feeling of happiness, and can teach them to work hard for achieving something.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
... working hard for achieving certain goal.. First of all, playing computer ga...
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Suggestion: every day
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...dren into two groups. One group allowed to play video games everyday for 1-2 hours, whi...
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...a while he gets excited and busy playing and my sister can finish all her work wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63796909492 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2972528976 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454746136865 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1288796029 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.347826087 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6956521739 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246666323108 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904626293647 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625071706187 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158600672813 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343706962511 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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