Do you agree or disagree with the following statements？ Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
“I have more than one job” is a common phrase that we hear sometimes from many people. Many people see that they should do many things for many different purposes and they will do it very well as they are doing one single task. However, personally, I think that when people do many things together at the same time, they will not do it properly as if they do each thing individually.
Doing many tasks at the same time can lead to instability on the person’s relation. And what I mean by instability in relation is unbalance marriage/fatherhood relationship. For illustration, many husbands and fathers work for at least two jobs in order to support their family and beloved ones. On the other hand, wives and kids would be alone at home for minimum 8-9 hours a day because the man is working for most of his time. With time, the kids will grow up and feeling that their father is not a part of the family and they might abandon his presence. My friend Sarah lived in the same situation. When she was eight years old, her father used to work for 12 hours a day including weekends and some holidays. She felt that she needed him at many certain times, yet he was busy and did not see her that much. He would see her once every month if she was lucky. Later when Sarah grew up, she knew a guy and she loved him and wanted to marry him. Nonetheless, when her father knew about this relation, he disapproved it and wanted to break up between Sarah and her boyfriend. Sarah argued with her dad and told him that he was not here for her for most of the time. Therefore, he did not have the right to disprove her marriage. Now, Sarah married the guy and she does not speak with her father at all. Her father felt that he should have spent more time with Sarah when he was working with two jobs.
Adding to this, some research found that people who perform multiple tasks at the same time can develop chronic diseases earlier. These studies were done on people who used to work in restaurants and factories at the same time. The studies measure the incidence of chronic diseases such as diabetes, heart failure, and hypertension over time on these group of people. Later, the studies’ results show that there were about 89% of these people develop chronic diseases at sooner age (30 years old) due to stresses and overload works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'hear'.
Suggestion: sometimes hear
...ne job' is a common phrase that we hear sometimes from many people. Many people see that ...
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Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...see that they should do many things for many different purposes and they will do it very well ...
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Line 3, column 1409, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arah when he was working with two jobs. Adding to this, some research found that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, at least, i mean, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49882903981 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3877575162 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498829039813 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9305806942 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3181818182 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4090909091 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179177584807 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541922859396 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999895885608 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156236612946 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153522496434 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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