Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it is so much vital for most companies that their workers carry out various assignments in the same time. Some people think that performing a great deal of work together can harm our efficiency. However, some others may find it logically wrong to do many things at a certain time. In my view, this action can be bad for workers due to two main reasons.
First, it can make an employee last in its job for a short period of time. When someone has to do many job assignments simultaneously each day, generally, he confronts with a lot of stress in his work atmosphere in any day of his work, since all of the responsibilities must be taken care of in a restricted time frame. Thus, there would be a great amount of anxiety about their appropriate fullfilment. For example, I used to work as a internal manager in a chemical company. My boss wanted me to handle a series of issues together like purchasing rutine materials, monitoring the working staff and managing chemical processes in the production line. Also, he expected me to do all of them perfectly. I love my job but gradually the feeling of being humiliated in front of my coworkers bother me each day. Therefore, I decided to quit my job due to its heavy stress and workload.
Second, number of serious mistakes can increase dramatically. Performing many different things together can lead to lower concentration levels in a person who is responsible to carry out all of those actions. When somebody work to deliver one specific job, he may put all of his efforts and concentration in it in order to do it right. On the other hand, when this person forced to bring about a series of activities, there is no choice other than dividing your concentration into all of them which decrease your managing ability and increase chance of failure in any one of them which can cause serious damages to the entire system.
In conclusion, these days, people are demanded to do many works that can reduce their efficiency. This decision can be problematic for many reasons, because it can make us hate our job or it can lead to great mistakes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wrongs'?
Suggestion: wrongs
...ever, some others may find it logically wrong to do many things at a certain time. In...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...an employee last in its job for a short period of time. When someone has to do many job assign...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tmosphere in any day of his work, since all of the responsibilities must be taken care of ...
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Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...filment. For example, I used to work as a internal manager in a chemical company....
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Line 9, column 74, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...s can increase dramatically. Performing many different things together can lead to lower conce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68548387097 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78050435614 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551075268817 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2229300878 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125721963414 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426815830708 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482138261782 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840836956995 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014508832956 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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