It has been said that money can save you at the rainy days. If I have the option to spend my money on something , I would spend it on long lasting stuff like jewleries. Even though some preople, if asked, they would say that jewleries have no emotional value, it covers people's need in case of financial crises, getting a better health car and a better education sysytem.
There is no doubt that jeweleries hold their price value. People can resale their golds,silvers or diamonds to support their expenses during a finacial crises. With current job compitions people subject to lose their jobs at any given time. Without jobs, people could suffer economically. They might unable to pay their car insurance, hydro bills or buy their basic need like food and shilter. As a result, people may end up in tremendous debt or even homeless. However, People who possessed jewelries can sale them in exchange of money. Thus, they can pay for their expenses untill they find another job and avoid being sheleterless.
In addition to the previous point, jeweleries used in direct way towered better health services. People who have been saving money from their young age, in form of jewelries, are more likely to use this moeny in exchange of better health services. Currently the government provides basic health palns like basic doctors visitis and generic medications. With extra money, people can buy privit health plan that can cover specialists, extended hospital stay and brand medications. Which is means that people can enjoy the privilege of accurate diagnosis, complete recovery and better treatment.
finally, There is no doubt that current education system is so pricey. A single dgree from university can cost thousand od dollars. People who saved their money in fprm of golds and jewelries are more likely able to support their childrens in their tution fees. For example, because I didn't work during collage time, I wasn't able to pay off my tution fees. As a result, I was at risk of .dismiss from the collage. However, thanks to my parents who were able to support me by paying my tuition fees until I get back on my feet. If my parents spent their money on their pleasure, I could be out of school by now.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that it is better for people to spend their money on something that keep its value rather than spending their money on something that provides momenteriun pleasure.
Essay evaluation report
Even though some preople, if asked, they would say that jewleries have no emotional value
Even though some preople, if asked, would say that jewleries have no emotional value
Sentence: They might unable to pay their car insurance, hydro bills or buy their basic need like food and shilter.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and unable
Sentence: If I have the option to spend my money on something , I would spend it on long lasting stuff like jewleries.
Error: jewleries Suggestion: jewelries
Sentence: Even though some preople, if asked, they would say that jewleries have no emotional value, it covers people's need in case of financial crises, getting a better health car and a better education sysytem.
Error: sysytem Suggestion: system
Error: preople Suggestion: people
Error: jewleries Suggestion: jewelries
Sentence: There is no doubt that jeweleries hold their price value.
Error: jeweleries Suggestion: jewelries
Sentence: People can resale their golds,silvers or diamonds to support their expenses during a finacial crises.
Error: finacial Suggestion: financial
Error: resale Suggestion: real
Sentence: With current job compitions people subject to lose their jobs at any given time.
Error: compitions Suggestion: conditions
Sentence: They might unable to pay their car insurance, hydro bills or buy their basic need like food and shilter.
Error: shilter Suggestion: shelter
Sentence: Thus, they can pay for their expenses untill they find another job and avoid being sheleterless.
Error: untill Suggestion: until
Error: sheleterless Suggestion: shelters
Sentence: In addition to the previous point, jeweleries used in direct way towered better health services.
Error: jeweleries Suggestion: jewelries
Sentence: People who have been saving money from their young age, in form of jewelries, are more likely to use this moeny in exchange of better health services.
Error: moeny Suggestion: money
Sentence: Currently the government provides basic health palns like basic doctors visitis and generic medications.
Error: visitis Suggestion: visits
Error: palns Suggestion: pains
Sentence: With extra money, people can buy privit health plan that can cover specialists, extended hospital stay and brand medications.
Error: privit Suggestion: profit
Sentence: finally, There is no doubt that current education system is so pricey.
Error: pricey Suggestion: price
Sentence: A single dgree from university can cost thousand od dollars.
Error: od Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: dgree Suggestion: agree
Sentence: People who saved their money in fprm of golds and jewelries are more likely able to support their childrens in their tution fees.
Error: tution Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: fprm Suggestion: form
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Sentence: For example, because I didn't work during collage time, I wasn't able to pay off my tution fees.
Error: wasn Suggestion: wash
Error: tution Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: collage Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: didn Suggestion: did
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that it is better for people to spend their money on something that keep its value rather than spending their money on something that provides momenteriun pleasure.
Error: momenteriun Suggestion: momentarily
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
most sentences have subject 'people' or 'they' or 'I'.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.324 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he option to spend my money on something , I would spend it on long lasting stuff ...
^^
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , silvers
...ice value. People can resale their golds,silvers or diamonds to support their expenses d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an buy privit health plan that can cover specialists, extended hospital stay and ...
^^
Line 5, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...complete recovery and better treatment. finally, There is no doubt that current ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...ete recovery and better treatment. finally, There is no doubt that current educati...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...A single dgree from university can cost thousand od dollars. People who saved their mone...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 286, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...eir tution fees. For example, because I didnt work during collage time, I wasnt able ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...use I didnt work during collage time, I wasnt able to pay off my tution fees. As a re...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tion fees. As a result, I was at risk of .dismiss from the collage. However, thank...
^^
Line 7, column 578, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts spent their money on their pleasure, I could be out of school by now. As a...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278617710583 0.229887763892 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.144708423326 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0755939524838 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0345572354212 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0885529157667 0.0685040099705 129% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129589632829 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0215982721382 0.0351676179071 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47199321839 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0237580993521 0.0309702414327 77% => OK
Particles: 0.00431965442765 0.00188951952338 229% => OK
Determiners: 0.0431965442765 0.0887237588012 49% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0323974082073 0.0209618222197 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0151187904968 0.0139019557991 109% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2429.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 415.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85301204819 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.33734939759 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21686746988 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156626506024 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0915662650602 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47199321839 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551807228916 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 64.0883191726 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.2916666667 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9174277937 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.208333333 120.699889404 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.644075263715 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 38.9784136546 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.60483870968 1.45489161554 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263079576509 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0975558421895 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0749263423525 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.43045102846 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171122186346 0.151897553556 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809245053508 0.114077575197 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814529880899 0.0781384742642 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.196674726889 0.336927656856 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.052653146966 0.067059652881 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194198131718 0.210909579961 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107576877644 0.0618886996521 174% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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