Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
It is better for the younger people to ask the risk and explore new things than the older people.
Nowadays taking risk and probing novel things is a specific issue that some psychologists are working on it. They are of the opinion that juveniles have to experience danger and exploring new articles, but others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that risks create serious problems for young people. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former perspective. I will address the most discernible reasons why I will this way in the following essay.
To begin with, young people have a lot of chances to experience new things, and obtain more knowledge about everything. Taking risk makes opportunities for adolescents to experiment their abilities in difficult conditions. Actually, be in dangerous situations cause everyone to experience cumbersome positions. These conditions teach a big lesson to people and that is how overcome in facing problems. For example, my father 30 years ago when he was a young, operated a textile factory with a big loan that he got from a bank. After months he realized that the factory sales are very low, because he could not manage factory accounts. Therefore, this problem caused he closed his factory. After that event, my father initiated new company, but before this work he had hired a counselor at low which he should control everything. Actually, my father founded that he should help from a professional person which organize the company. As a result, we understand that some risks or mistakes can have benefits for us, in addition we can teach from these errors.
Moreover, taking risk has a positive effect on spirit. When young people take decision to do a work which has a risk for him/her, it shows that he/she has an animate mentality. Psychologists believe that following risky efforts cause human’s spirit gets good feedbacks from the action, consequently, these feedbacks have long-term results on the mentality. Therefore, in the future, people whose doing unsafe works probably have a sprightful life. As you can see, occasionally, youngsters can change their life with risky works, and in the future will have better life.
In conclusion, taking all reason and examples into account, I believe that risky works and investigating novel fresh things have good impacts on young people. This is because take risk cause we gain more experiences, and this is because doing hazardous works affect our future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11508951407 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76635560982 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567774936061 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5323896403 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2380952381 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192170633842 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543165699083 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385090555527 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122467317627 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443922610632 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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