Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents have a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. They enhance our success endlessly because they encompass our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that when the parents are busy and do not have time, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports rather than use that time doing things together related to schoolwork.
First and foremost, spending time with your young people through the sport has a profound effect on their health. Practicing physical activities improve their welfare. For instance, when the parents and their offspring practicing exercises, they can burn calories and get rid of their negative energies. If they try to guide their child and learn them for example how to use the cardio devices, both of them can benefit from this vital activity because both of them they will burn calories. I have a child; he is ten years old, I used to take him on the weekend to the gym, we engage in a valuable workout for a few hours. I realized that our physical appearance improved accordingly. Moreover, this task helps us to build our muscle tone and improve our body shape. Hence, being immersed in a sport with your new generation is the foundation to improve your quality of life.
Second, it is a good way for parents to have fun with their children when they allocate time to practice the sport with them. Indeed, sometimes young people need to escape from their hectic nature of studying by engaging in a sport, they can feel a great deal of comfort. For example, the students spend ample time in their school executing their study-related task. So, it will be a vital idea if the parents support them to squander time together to engage in physical activity. They will spend an excellent time relaxing and have fun. Besides, if the parents used this behavior with their kids, this will boost their relationship, it will strengthen their rapport. Also, the sport will improve youth's cognitive abilities because it helps to fresh their mind. As you can see, the parent should allocate time to practice the game with offspring to get rid of their stress.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, it is highly beneficial for parents to squander time with their kids through the sport. Not only to improve their health but also to have fun with them. Hopefully, all parents follow this spectacular strategy to flourish the populace.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. a lot of duplicated words/sentences.
2. a lot of examples. need more arguments
3. need some comparisons. why not homework.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1932 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.701 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.366 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.551 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.441 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83941605839 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45702581681 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515815085158 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7391545769 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4090909091 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6818181818 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338210653218 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105113464658 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104294020925 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232937135773 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080763887622 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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