Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people prefer to buy technological devices as soon as they are available to the public. Others people prefer to wait until many people have used them. Which do you prefer?
Currently, with the advancement of technology, the speed of upgrading hi-tech products is extremely accelerated, thus triggers a heated discussion that should we purchase the technological devices once they are launched. Some individuals reckon that in order to keep pace with the trend of cutting-edge technology, they are doomed to purchase it. Personally speaking, I harbor the idea that I am inclined to wait until a myriad of individuals have used them for a while and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, it is widely acknowledged that the price of hi-tech products are continuously declining once they have been released, therefore provided that we purchase the newest generation of advanced technological devices, the decline of price ensues, even in two days. Although we can utilize and enjoy the advanced technology in ahead of others, it is worthless to expend a large portion of the money to pursue the exciting feelings about it. The research conducted by Beijing Youth to evaluate individuals’ gratification of purchasing new products indicates that 78% of them are not consent with their purchase of newest products since they contend that those products are not worthy of paying so much money. Meanwhile, they tend to feel regret each time they see the plummeting price.
What’s more, apart from the price of hi-tech products, what I take into consideration is another factor, the evaluation from other users. Obviously, despite the great achievement we human beings have attained in technology, technological devices still possess a bunch of innate flaws which cannot be grappled with. Therefore, provided that making a purchase as soon as the products are launched, we cannot predict the potential inborn deficiencies, thus our feelings of utilization will suffer, especially at the cost of the exorbitant prices. On the contrary, there are always individuals waiting for the launch of cutting-edge products, after they utilize the products, they are capable of rendering first-hand information about the feeling of utilization, for instance, the new-added functions, the convenience it can bring to us and so on. On the basis of the mentioned information the users post in forums or propagate through social networks, I am entitled to have a comprehensive understanding of the products’ merits and flaws. Hinging on those pieces of information I amass from disparate resources, I can make a wise decision about whether should I purchase it by weighing the pros and cons of these new products so as to avoid waste money in needless affairs and optimize the delegation of income.
Admittedly, making a purchase once the new products hit the market enables us to brag off to our friends and attain a sense of superiority, nevertheless, it makes no sense, especially when we are informed of the declining price and unacceptable deficiencies.
In a nutshell, from what has been mentioned above, I would like to reiterate my standpoint that waiting until many people have used them is my preferred option since, for one thing, lots of money can be saved with the gradual process of lowering prices. For another, after other individuals’ purchase, I can evaluate whether the products deserve buying by gathering information from forums or relatives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 622, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the newest'.
Suggestion: of the newest
...hem are not consent with their purchase of newest products since they contend that those ...
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Line 3, column 1233, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...the pros and cons of these new products so as to avoid waste money in needless affairs a...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to buy'.
Suggestion: to buy
...n evaluate whether the products deserve buying by gathering information from forums or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, as to, for instance, for one thing, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2780.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27514231499 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1112775216 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525616698292 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 880.2 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7325063783 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.75 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9375 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144018174095 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479263037386 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461997163838 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0846048728299 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592506279774 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 11.7677419355 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 10.1575268817 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.