Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
The opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
regarding the status quo of increrasing influences of famous characteristics such as athletes on memebers of a community, their view of point could have many direct consequences on each individual. A plethora of people may hold the opinon that the idea of famous person are more significant to youngesters in comparison to older people. others, on the other hand, may radically hold and opposite view and allege that youngesters influence by different people at the same rate. I am of the opinion that the former idea is true. my reasons are manifold, two of the most conspicuous of which in order to justify my view will be explored in the following essay.
First of all, one of the most remarkable proofs of this claim is related to this importance that each young member of a society would like to have a strong idol, and follow his or her way in their personal life. this tendency is directly related to this fact that the outcomes of the way, which was passed by celebrity were wholly positive. And also, the pictures of famous celebrities and his or her news demonstrated on the wall of the city, on bruchors and generally on the worldwide advertisements. In other words, since celebrities have a powerful talent in a particular way and field and that is to easy to see, youngesters, having the same filed of intersets tend to follow the celebrity`s way. this is as a obvious result of the occuracy of the celebrity path that led to positive long term consequences such as being success in international competition.
Second and equally exquisite point of this assertion is about this fact that each person at the young age of his or her life have some ambitious thoughts in his or her mind, and attempt to find a famous person and copy his or her style. To shed more lights on this matters, consider yourself at the young age as a convincing example. Without a shadow of doubt, at that age of your life you were fostering varieties of some ambitious thinking on your mind. For example, I totally remember that when I was young I wanted to be a famous soccer player in the world, so I was following a famous soccer player named Ronaldinho, and I really tended to copy her behaviour not only in the game, but also, in his private life.
All in all, regarding the aforementioned arguments, we may the draw the conclusion that young people tend to pursue the way of famous celebrities. this is a result of this fact that they would like to have a powerful idol, and they are raising several ambitious thoughts in their mind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, regarding, second, so, for example, such as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6570155902 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77921733368 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467706013363 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8537607122 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.6875 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113300511621 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414479592677 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338581586493 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693962543927 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265533740401 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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