Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weight pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that they are always in multiple variables to a truth. Some individuals believe that infomercials being shown to public aged two to five should not be broadcast. In my humble opinion, I agree that toddlers shown not be allowed for commercials at an early age because they are on their critical age and can quickly adapt to their environment. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of individuals would agree to the notion that kids easily absorb everything in their surrounding. Moreover, all in their field of spectrum they feel and think that what is shown to them is actually true. In other words, when they see adverts in their TV program they feel the need to acquire food items or toys in the commercial. In fact, they are not in the right mind to decide for themselves if these products will be beneficial for them or not. A great example of this is my Niece Sam, when he see adverts in the screen he immediately has this impulse to ask his parents for the toys. Sam says that he wanted it because his favorite cartoon character uses such toys and he must have it what ever it may takes. He would cry or shout if his parents will not grant his wishes to have the toy. I believe that, advertising tends to manipulate their young minds so that they can earn a profit.
Secondly, infomercials has a negative effects on our kids because they are not equipped to see whether products or items being advertised are being truthful to their ads. For instance, commercial target young children such branding their product like cereal with fortified with iron, vitamins and minerals. But the truth is, it is loaded with many calories and high content of sugar and fat which is unhealthy for them. To illustrate more thoroughly, here in the Philippines there is a ad which is banned to be shown in the public due to they have unfavorable impact to consumers. This commercial which is a food item, it tackle when you eaten this product then your bones will be strong and you will be healthy. But the food label on the back only states no health benefits on children and studies show that it exceed the needed calcium of ages 2-5 years old and it is actually bad for kids due to it can lead to bone thinning. Long story short, it's clear as day to me that negative effect of advertising can be detrimental to young children.
To summarize this, young children should be carefully watched for commercial in the television. This is because advertisers usually misleads their mind for unnecessary purchases which only would benefit the company and kids will only because some products have harmful effect on their growth and development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
...xample of this is my Niece Sam, when he see adverts in the screen he immediately ha...
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Line 5, column 485, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ughly, here in the Philippines there is a ad which is banned to be shown in the p...
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Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tackles'?
Suggestion: tackles
...his commercial which is a food item, it tackle when you eaten this product then your b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, after all, for instance, i feel, in fact, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67572815534 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52619045832 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51067961165 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.786586203 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.454545455 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155111072986 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511045891476 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500549197255 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103915525524 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502008342945 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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