Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television marketing is becoming more and more irrelevant with their content now-a-days. They are just showing what would attract the viewers rather that than justifying how their product is useful for the viewers. The prompt claims that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed. I agree with this statement for two reasons.
First, most of the television advertisements targeting young audience explicitly have content which attracts them irrespective of their demerits. For instance, many of the advertisements of processed foods have mascots of any currently popular characters among the children. And sometimes they even sell some free items related to the mascot to influence the children to buy them. This kind of influence will make the child to buy it without considering if item has any actual worth to it. In most cases, even parents would let them from buy it, knowing it is unnecessary, as they wouldn't want their child to feel sad for it. The above example shows how television advertisements affect the children. During this tender age, the children will easily get swayed by colorful images and songs shown by the advertisements to misguide them.
No child below age five would have the mental capability to decide for themselves but can be major cause for most of items bought by their parents. The television advertisements generally tend to make use of this, to make the children put pressure on the parents to yield and increase their sales. For instance, most of the household equipment have television advertisements which would talks about their features. But few have paintings or drawings of some cartoon characters which will attract the children, thereby being a deciding factor for buying it.
So, I think that television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... it, knowing it is unnecessary, as they wouldnt want their child to feel sad for it. Th...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the items') or simply say ''most items''.
Suggestion: most of the items; most items
...r themselves but can be major cause for most of items bought by their parents. The television...
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Line 9, column 388, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'talk'
Suggestion: talk
...e television advertisements which would talks about their features. But few have pain...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for instance, i think, kind of, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79492397034 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0866405075 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250634310276 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11013592447 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131937022134 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235977423416 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151744894237 0.0645574589148 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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