Do you agree or disagree with the following statement/
Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed
Advertising approaches today progress rapidly, they use advanced technology, involving celebrities, and many other things to persuade customers. Also, they targeted a wide range of ages; kids, teenagers as well as adults. Although adults have control on themselves to avoid misleading information and exaggeration in advertisings, on the other hand, kids especially very young kids do not capable of doing that. So, personally, I think advertisings that directed to young kids may have bad influences on kids and their families. Thus, this kind of commercials should not be allowed.
primarily, kids instinctively want to get everything, particularly toys and candies or desserts. Moreover, they can not understand what is good or bad for them. As long with that, it goes without saying advertisings companies get benefits from this normal tendency to get those things. As the advertising companies realize this fact and they make the advertisings look spectacular and amazing by using bright colors, funny songs, and enjoyable scripts. So, that would definitely encourage kids to get that product whatever the quality and the contents of it. A recent TV show focus on one of the kid's snack advertising and how the advertising company made a great commercial to bad product. So they sold a huge amount of it, despite the presence of a lot of artificial colors and flavors and cheap preservative as well.
Secondary, kids usually insist on getting the product that they see on TV without considering to its cost. In turn, that may put extra financial pressure on their parents, as they can not offer this money. At the same time, kids can not understand the meaning of money so that may make them disappointed and feel bad for their parents. I remember my friend's son who wanted to buy a very expensive Lego because he watched its advertising on TV. At that time, his mother lost her job so she could not afford the money for this. Then he kept crying and did not want to talk with his mother for a long time. Seriously, that made her feel bad and upset too.
Some people thinks that there are over estimation to the effects of advertisings on kids, and researchers and psychologist go way far from the reality. Despite everything, these are just commercials and parents have the control over everything concerning their kids. So if they do not believe in this product, they can easily do not buy it. Even though, that is true to some extent, but still, this kind of advertisings affect kids in different ways may be way more than what we are expected.
In nutshell, advertising targeted young kids have sever impact on kids and their parents as well, as the kids could not distinguish between the real world, and the imagination that may use in commercials. That may lead them to believe everything and finally, they hurt themselves and may get disappointed and feel bad even if they bought what they need because the product may come up with a look, a taste, and an action that completely different from what they already watched on TV.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, thus, well, i think, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88781431335 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76516605524 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518375241779 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6375354851 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.08 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0928424967737 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0294961664399 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315514147401 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620890192309 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035278570903 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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