There is a widespread controversy that which of the following ability is more important for happiness. The first one is the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time, and the other is the ability to make many new friends easily. From my perspective, both of them are important for both of them have valuable advantage.
To begin with, the ability to maintain friendship helps people to have old friend. Old friends can provide more effective assistance. People have more common experience with their old friends, which means old friends are more familiar with our evolution in thought. When we stick in trouble, old friend would be the one, who can find out why is this problem happened and bring us an appropriate solution. For example, I'm used to share programing experience with one of my college roommates. If there were any coding problem, we always solved it together and improve together. Later then, I meet a program problem on my intern work which could took me several hours to figure it out and debug nothing. When I call this friend to discuss this problem, he directly point out it is might caused by stack overflow, which I usually ignore when I coded for my homework. Then I checked the stack status right away and easily solved the problem.
We also need to cultivate the ability to easily make new friend, because it can help us to blend with in the new environment more quickly. In the modern society, every one is competing to gain more opportunities. To get ourselves quickly used to the new environment enables us to be more likely to get the resources from the new environment. The best way to blend with in an environment is to make friend. For example, a new internship employee of a big company would face this situation. In a big company, there are always many internship employees recruited in at the same time. What determines who can finally leave is for most part how many and how well works each of these employee done during the intern. People who can quickly make friend with those old employees will get more chance to show off their skills. In another perspective, old employees would be more likely to help those fresh man they are familiar with. In this case, I believe the ability to easily make new friends rise the probability of a new employee being accepted.
In conclusion, both of the ability are important because the former can provide with more effective assistance, and the later can help people blend with in the new environment more quickly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time, and ...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time, and the other is the ability to make m...
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Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r both of them have valuable advantage. To begin with, the ability to maintain f...
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Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...s an appropriate solution. For example, Im used to share programing experience wit...
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Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Later than'?
Suggestion: Later than
...olved it together and improve together. Later then, I meet a program problem on my intern ...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...it together and improve together. Later then, I meet a program problem on my intern ...
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Line 3, column 763, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...nd to discuss this problem, he directly point out it is might caused by stack overflo...
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Line 3, column 785, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have caused' or 'cause'?
Suggestion: have caused; cause
...blem, he directly point out it is might caused by stack overflow, which I usually igno...
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Line 6, column 673, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this employee' or 'these employees'?
Suggestion: this employee; these employees
...art how many and how well works each of these employee done during the intern. People who can ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y of a new employee being accepted. In conclusion, both of the ability are imp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74324324324 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57548171786 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470720720721 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.845269645 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5652173913 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36158337084 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114858585868 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121628247032 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267185897997 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119041213519 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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