There is a widespread controversy over two abilities. The first one is the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time, and the other is the ability to make many new friends easily. From my perspective, both of them are important to gain happiness, as both of them have a valuable advantage.
In the first place, the ability to maintain friendship helps people to have old friends, who can provide us with more effective assistance. People have more common experience with their old friends. As a result old friends are more familiar with our evolution in thought. If we are stuck in trouble, old friend would be the one, who can find out the cause of the problem and help us with an appropriate solution. For example, my brother, Elon, always benefits from a friend,Erin, with whom he has kept in touch for several years. Elon is a computer engineer working in a big company and he always faces many coding problems. Once a tough computer glitch bothered Elon for a long time, and Erin shoot that trouble on the phone, even without seeing the codes, while all his co-worker couldn't figure out what lead to that bug. That is because Erin is familiar with Elon's coding style in which Elon always put the pointer into the function without deleting, and this style, in some situations, will cause the stack overflow problems. Thanks to this old friend, Elon got the opportunity to be promoted on that weekend and they ate dinner together for celebration.
We also need to cultivate the ability to easily make new friends, because it can help us to blend with in the new environment more quickly. In the modern society, every one is competing to gain more opportunities. To integrate in the new environment quickly enables us to be more likely to get the resources from the new environment. Especially a new intern in a big company, in which there are competition on different levels, would benefit from this ability for sure. For example, My cousin, Billie, have taken a job in a big technology company in Silicon Valley, since he is really good at making new friends. Approximately six months ago, Billie got an intern chance in that company together with other nineteen outstanding interns. By quickly making friends with some old engineer in the company he soon showed his accomplished coding skills; thus he get a chance to solve an important problem independently. When solving that tough problem, an old engineer helped him with some computing resources which helped him finish that job easier and as a result he got the offer due to the contribution. It is evident that the ability of making friends easily helped Billie to get advantages to compete with others and finally succeed.
In conclusion, both of the abilities are important because the former can provide more effective assistance, and the latter helps people blend with in the new environment more quickly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time, and ...
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Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time, and the other is the ability to make m...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mmon experience with their old friends. As a result old friends are more familiar ...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Erin
...her, Elon, always benefits from a friend,Erin, with whom he has kept in touch for sev...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...eing the codes, while all his co-worker couldnt figure out what lead to that bug. That ...
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Line 5, column 857, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...his accomplished coding skills; thus he get a chance to solve an important problem ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2426.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84231536926 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66359768181 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465069860279 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9108483847 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.272727273 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337343332816 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109594814225 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113902420254 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242942963348 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755527436221 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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