Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people have more attention to the opinions of celebrities than older ones. Most young people seriously follow news published about celebrities but it is very rare that these kinds of news be important for older people in society. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that lots old people spend a remarkable time in social networks on reading and following famous people. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
First and foremost, In oppose of older people, young people looking for a wonderful or successful character to imitate them. Fame has been the mutual wish of the young period of life, for anyone. For example, when I was 20 years old, I was so interested in to became a famous actor. I was collecting posters and image of Laila Hatami, one of the well-known and popular actor in Iran. Even I was going to have surgery on my face to be more look like her. Nonetheless, after several years I could find my own interesting way of living. I stopped to imitate her and I started my own plan.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that older people are too busy to want to follow celebrities. For example, now I go to my workplace at 6 Am, and I work there for 8 hours. When I come back all of my time full with handling my children and working on my research project. I have not a few time watching television or check the social networks.
Finally, yet importantly, some of the old people are even more passion to imitate celebrities than usual young ones. However, if we have a more precise view of this fact, we can see that most of these people have not a very similar living condition like their counterpart. Often they are unemployed people with high inherent wealth or someone who untypical like to be so beautiful and in the center of attention. Overall, this group create a minority in society.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the opinion of celebrities is more important for younger members of society than older people. Because of the successful model and example for their life, older people have not enough time to follow famous people and imitation of celebrities by older people is a very uncommon phenomenon in society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: opposes
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Suggestion: some
...networks. Finally, yet importantly, some of the old people are even more passion to imi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e have a more precise view of this fact, we can see that most of these people hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, still, well, for example, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72027972028 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61379065481 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508158508159 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9351762879 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4285714286 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277272781234 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812415488365 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112542165064 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167054189681 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125971811203 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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