Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
TPO 46 - Task 2
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that famous people such celebrities play a significant role in a society and they affect individuals' point of view dramatically. While many people hold the opinion that young individuals are more susceptible to celebrities' opinions rather than adults, I concur this perspective. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, young people are not mature enough to distinguish among various opinions. To be more specific, youngsters are seeking to use other people, especially the celebrities, opinions and experiences to solve their problems in various situations. Therefore, they are more subject to accept celebrities opinions and put it into practice to pave their paths. On the other hand, adults are able to make right decisions individually since they have gained valuable experiences in their lives. My personal example can shed some light on this issue. When I high school student, I needed to choose a major for my future. In this time, I enrolled to a conference that a well-known entertainer gave a lecture about the importance of the economic in humans' life. Therefore, I was interested in this field and decided to choose economic as my major.
In addition, juveniles follow celebrities more than adults do. To put it in the other word, younger people take celebrities as their role model and strive to imitate them in every aspects. It is no secret to anyone that role models have great effects on people's life. For instance, most of the well-known companies use celebrities to advertise their products and introduce their products to society. These companies are aware the impact of celebrities' voice to most of their fans. In this case, most of the celebrities’ fans are young person, so they will accept celebrities’ opinions. On the contrary, adults has less free time to follow celebrities.
In conclusion, considering all the mentioned points and examples, I do believe that celebrities' opinion have strong influences on young persons than old one. This is because young people are inclined in using others opinion, especially famous people, and they take celebrities as their role models.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2492917847 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96802477873 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541076487252 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6093917889 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.65 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.65 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177970715558 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577890684051 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440406320544 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122826346689 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348705842995 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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