Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not toward enough time to help their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
young people are the future of society and they can lead our world in height point with their great work. However, a plethora of people contents if time is available still they not interested to contribute to the community and others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believed that work pressure discourages the youth to involve in community services. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound subsequent followings.
To commence with, Young children nowadays are more busy with their academic activities. Moreover, they spend most of their time doing homework, project, assignment etc. This pressure actually prevents them to involve in the community services. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in school I was interested in several outdoor activities like helping the street children, providing some basic level of education etc. That time academic pressure was less. But, after entering college, I was not interested in that activity because of pressure. In Bangladesh, college time is the crucial point of the student's future. If anyone dropped from that stage it can conclude that he will miss his secure future. Thus, some situation prevents the youth to involve in that activity.
Furthermore, with the expansion of technology young people are getting attracted to the internet, social media, youtube. As a result, they spend their free time searching, chatting and watching movie etc instead of helping others. For example, I heard from my father when they were young they spend most of the free time by doing various community service like cleaning roads, cutting or shaping trees, feeding poor people etc. Besides, they had a young group whose task was to collected the money and donated to poor children for education. Thus, technology also a barrier for young people.
To recapitulate, I am of the opinion that young children are less active in community service because of social and academic pressure. However, I personally think that they should also aware of the negative impact of technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
young people are the future of society and th...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: world
...future of society and they can lead our world in height point with their great work. However, a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 647, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e crucial point of the students future. If anyone dropped from that stage it can c...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, as to, for example, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29106628242 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73303704388 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538904899135 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8279728844 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4545454545 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186505722513 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051109055674 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524269635801 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104748894548 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484175111769 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.