Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that our new generation's priorities are slightly different compared to a few decades ago. The way that they dedicate their time to different tasks is one of these changes. Whether or not our youngsters allot their time to community like before is the controversial question which is often raised. I firmly believe that today's youths are involved with a variety of things that hinder them to be a community person. In what follows, I will explain some cogent reasons to support my idea.
the main aspect to point out is that in the modern era, the new generation should pay painstaking attention to their education. Thereby they are not able to contribute to the community like a few years ago. Nowadays, collegiate education is part and parcel of success and it is imperative for students to attend high prestigious university and get a degree to make sure that they can land a better job. Consequently, they are more successful individuals in society. For instance, My brother is preparing himself for graduation and as a corollary of the fact that he has to graduate with exemplary grades to guarantee his career life, he burns the midnight oil to study diligently. On the other hand, it was not the case when my father decided to study and work. That time there were plenty of jobs with a flexible schedule at their disposal; hence, he had a lot of time to help his community. This example clearly shows us how our youths are more busy with academics rather than before.
Another subtle point is that these days, the financial burden on young adults is too much to shoulder comparing to our ancestor's time. In today's world, people should work from dawn to dusk to make ends meet and survive the economic climate. Housing, pricy books, exorbitant tuition are some compelling examples of students' expenses. Not all students can easily afford these expenses, even some should take part-time jobs or work at their university. Moreover, being in a poor financial situation exert too much stress. Therefore they cannot overcome their lives calamities. Not only do students have to work to pay off their expenses, but also they are experiencing stressful life. So it is crystal clear that their contribution to society has been fading over the course of time. On the flip side, our last generations had a stress-free life without money matter.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree with the prompt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ancial situation exert too much stress. Therefore they cannot overcome their lives calami...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, even so, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85645933014 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67614396585 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4621208149 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2608695652 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1739130435 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155055904689 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403216891713 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036194388565 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945891980702 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00831057639757 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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