Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No one can cast a shadow of doubt on how parents play an influential role in their kids' future. Parents constantly provide their children with infinite advice and experiences to move them forward to succeed. Whether parents should incentivize their offsprings to pursue a part-time job to be more successful or not, is the controversial question which is often raised. I firmly believe that taking part-time jobs is not a prudent course of action for kids since it distracts them from their main goal. In what follows, I will explain some cogent reasons to support my statement.

The main aspect to point out is that children lose their focus on academic purposes. Nowadays, collegiate education is part and parcel of success and it is imperative for student to attend high prestigious university to guarantee their future and eventually land a better job. In order to eclipse their peers, they should pay painstaking attention to their lesson and study diligently. For instance, roughly two years ago, my son was offered a new position in university as a part-time job. A first glance he thought it would be a great mean for him to lessen some financial burden by earning money, but when he asked our opinion I remind him about his ultimate goal being a physician and how hard it is to stand out of a crowd and be a successful individual at university. Thereby, considering his assignments and projects got tough and time-consuming he deciphered that he should dedicate his majority of time to academics. Had he worked as a part-time employee, he would have not been able to meet his university requirements.

Another subtle point to mention is that students have to enjoy their life as well. In the modern era, there is a great amount of pressure on new generation due to the timing issue. So parents can be the best educator for their kids to show them how they can enjoy their time and diminish their stress. Many other feasible alternatives like attending sports club or music classes exist. By performing these activities not only our youth can experience a better life, but also they refresh their psyche and have a better understanding of their lives. The more they spend on recreational activities, the better the personality they will have.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly disagree with the prompt, in light of the fact that students should allot their time to better use like academics or entertainments.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...er feasible alternatives like attending sports club or music classes exist. By perform...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92420537897 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84054129779 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577017114914 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1308389424 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256576297432 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792263545583 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552729605296 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161867785351 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646494752465 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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