Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.
As some people may hold the view that the young people should put all their focus on their major occupation; however, some others takes an opposite viewpoint and believe that a several different tries before a long term career is a decent idea. As far as I am concerned, occupying in a various tasks before the main job shed the light to more success in the main vocation. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first exquisite reason which advocates this viewpoint is the chance of practical experience, which gains from this process. It is cogently obvious that it impossible to experience these skills in the university duration. The most of the universities schedules are planned based upon the theoretical lessons; besides, even they have the practical classes, a short period of the education in the university is not an appropriate duration to cover the whole practical skills. Therefore, by trying a several different jobs before the main occupation, they can become more expert on that task. This situation enhances their successes in the future jobs.
The second reason is a decent resume. Nowadays, the criteria of the employment go beyond the well education. Some factors such as the social communications abilities, international language skills, and different careers experiences are accounted more important. Thus, by trying various jobs before the long term career, it will be an opportunity to enhance and flourish the resume. For instance, one of the vivid examples of this scenario is my own experience. The last year I worked in a structure company for a six months after that I was willing to start my new career in the one of the prestige architectural company. The recommendation which my previous boss assigned had a great impact on my acceptances in the new occupation.
The last reason which confirms the accuracy of my perspective is the chance of the getting informed about the talents and possibilities. As a matter of fact, an individual's plans and abilities on the theoretical phases seem accurate without any mistakes, but in the real world when they go to practice do they really seem like that? The practical experience paves the path to get familiar with the talents and possibilities of plan. The noteworthy interesting research conducted in my country Iran illustrates that more than the sixty nine percent of the people imagination of their abilities are beyond their real capacities. Consequently, by trying various jobs they will have a chance to get familiar with their capabilities and accuracy of their plan.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that trying a several different tasks before the main career advocates getting familiar with the practical experiences, enhancing the resume, and getting aware of the talents and accuracy of our plan. All of them lead to be successful in their long term job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...n opposite viewpoint and believe that a several different tries before a long term career is a de...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'try'?
Suggestion: try
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'task'?
Suggestion: task
... I am concerned, occupying in a various tasks before the main job shed the light to m...
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Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...ractical skills. Therefore, by trying a several different jobs before the main occupation, they c...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...herefore, by trying a several different jobs before the main occupation, they can be...
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...try Iran illustrates that more than the sixty nine percent of the people imagination of th...
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Suggestion: several
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'task'?
Suggestion: task
...clusion that trying a several different tasks before the main career advocates gettin...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235514018692 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.115887850467 0.158761421928 73% => OK
Adjectives: 0.12523364486 0.0866891130778 144% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0299065420561 0.046263068375 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0579439252336 0.0685040099705 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121495327103 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0280373831776 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9231015002 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0224299065421 0.0309702414327 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0018691588785 0.00188951952338 99% => OK
Determiners: 0.155140186916 0.0887237588012 175% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.011214953271 0.0209618222197 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011214953271 0.0139019557991 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2993.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 491.0 408.028673835 120% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09572301426 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366598778004 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285132382892 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217922606925 0.174417080927 125% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154786150713 0.112833075102 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9231015002 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501018329939 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 58.6003089641 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3181818182 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1813603646 48.84282405 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.045454545 120.699889404 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3181818182 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.644075263715 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 50.8314201074 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.88990825688 1.45489161554 130% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2256118559 0.300154397459 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109570434596 0.103427244359 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0641510274432 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.550981922745 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139521213858 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920666909897 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508817900798 0.0781384742642 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.519654415916 0.336927656856 154% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0507603124792 0.067059652881 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164550834071 0.210909579961 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260562674897 0.0618886996521 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.