Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
undoubtedly, if a country wants to become thrive and has a prosperous future, it needs to spend time and money on the educational system to foster people who are beneficial for society.in this respect, while some people believe that it is better to invest money on the education of kids, others stand on the opposite side, holding this opinion that expending education budget on universities has more advantages. I, personally, think that the latter idea is better and I will substantiate my viewpoint in the following essay.
To begin with, the university is a place which involves people who are highly productive and significant for the development of our world. They actually produce science that is useful for all kinds of companies which are the heart of progress of each country and whole industrial centers completely depend on the scientific context that is studied at universities. therefore, investing money on universities directly benefits society, for example, in my university all students' project are used in related companies and last month my friend won the reward of the best innovation of the year which is about optimizing the process of making electricity and his research is now used in three major company of electricity in the country.
Furthermore, one undergoes so many changes from childhood to adult ages. If the government consider a huge amount of financial support for young children educations, it is not clearly obvious whether this investment works properly, so this plan is completely risky. Hence, it is better to spend money on another area that the degree of risk is lower. To be more specific, statistics from an investigation of the educational system on people from early ages to adult ages indicates that only 35 percent of them become a useful person for the country. Because of this unacceptable result, they decide to utilize more budgets on research centers like universities and laboratories.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that investment on universities is more effective since the risk level is lower than younger ages' education; In addition, these places consist of some ingenious people that can change the world dramatically and affect all parts of the country directly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21951219512 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93643410463 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566395663957 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.666541447 48.9658058833 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.090909091 100.406767564 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5454545455 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0641856708197 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0239764349887 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228345156358 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415725071396 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016608158595 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 11.7677419355 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 58.1214874552 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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