It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated and busy world, people should pay attention to their diet, and is very important for governments to educate people to pay attention to healthy food. Some people believe that government plays its role correctly, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, governments should do many works to achieve their goals on this issue, because nowadays society going in the opposite direction of living healthy and eating nutritious food. In subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important point to be mentioned is that commercials that show on TV or on billboards in the subways are very impressive to people's minds and direct them to their product. Therefore, government should monitor commercial more than anything, nowadays most commercials are about fast food and how people could make them in a short time and it is obvious to everyone that kinds of food are not healthy. In the world that we live everything going so fast and people do not pay enough attention to their eating, so that is the governments’ responsibility to avoid them using fast food, so they have to manage the commercial, and support companies that make and sell healthy food. For example, when I am working in my office I do not have that much time to make food for myself or go to a good restaurant. Because the healthy and good restaurants are not close, so I have to go to the nearest cafe and buy some food from that or going the fast food shop that is so close to my workplace. That is why the government should do their job much better and increase the number of healthy restaurants.
Another reason, which should be taken into consideration, is that the price of healthy food and good material is so high and after the economic issue that happened to most of the country, people do not have that much money to eat good food. Most people prefer to eat cheap food and save money for other necessary staff, so their diet becomes weak. That is the government's duty to provide cheap and healthy food for everyone in the dark economic period. For example in the past few months, the price of meat and chicken get increased and poor people are not able to buy this material, and because of this issue, the statistics of indigestion have increased.
To wrap it up, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that the role of governments is undeniable, and they should try harder to have a healthy society. They should manage the financial and economic issues to provide a better life for their people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...so their diet becomes weak. That is the governments duty to provide cheap and healthy food ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75108225108 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67309006691 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45670995671 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9681786538 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.1875 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.875 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338289839867 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115412789811 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087481307026 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209446508598 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105444917761 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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