Do you agree or disagree? It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than ask other for advice.
Technological and industrial advancements have considerably changed human’s life style. However, they have also brought about new difficulties which people have never experienced yet. Therefore, the question whether it is better to use our knowledge and experience to overcome a problem than take advice or use others’ experiences, has long been a topic of controversy among people and different circles. On the one hand, there are people who adhere to the belief that people should solve their problems utilizing their experiences since they know themselves and their problems better than others; on the other hand, others believe that receiving advice from others has outstanding merits. As far as I am concerned, the later carries further weight not only do different experiences and ideas aid them to overcome their solution effectively but also they also save their time and money in some cases.
Different people have different perspective encountering same difficulty or problem. In fact, people will come up with diversity of solutions to overcome a problem depending on their talents, skills and educational backgrounds. There are people who always attempt to solve problems in logical manner since they think emotions and feelings usually bring about new difficulty worse than previous difficulty. For instance, I have an older brother who were on a date with a girl and she fell in love him, but my brother rejected her marriage request since he was not ready to take responsibility of a family. However, there are people who tend to solve their problem based on their intuition or people who just consider economic perspective of a problem. Then, taking advice from different people will provide different solutions for one particular problem permitting us to pick the most appropriate one in our case. Subsequently, provided people encounter a problem, they should take others’ advice.
Taking advice from others aid us to save our time and money facing problems. In fact, there are some problems which if we want to solve them utilizing our knowledge and experience, we may lose money and waste our time. For instance, last year I would install a windows on my laptop while I had not ever installed, therefore, after several days I decided to call one of my friend to receive his advice how to install it. Furthermore, there are some situation which we are not on normal mental state to decide how to solve a problem. For instance, we may be angry regarding a private issue making decision based on our emotion, as a result of which we will have another serious problem due to wrong decision. Consequently, people cannot solve their problems in effective way unless they take advice from others.
To wrap it up, taking advice is more beneficial since not only does it provide us different solution for particular problem but also does it assist us to find the most cost-effective and time saving solution depending on our situation. Then, if I encounter a problem, I will consult with my friends and older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... have never experienced yet. Therefore, the question whether it is better to use our knowledge and e...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
... In fact, there are some problems which if we want to solve them utilizing our kno...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a window' or simply 'windows'?
Suggestion: a window; windows
...For instance, last year I would install a windows on my laptop while I had not ever insta...
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Line 5, column 449, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
...install it. Furthermore, there are some situation which we are not on normal mental state...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in fact, as a result, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12024048096 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80343316544 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486973947896 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9813529855 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.75 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.95 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197552994329 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660818584306 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568417609771 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122871697425 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534762072514 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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