Do you agree or disagree. Movies and television has negative affect more than positive affect on young people.
There is a huge impact on people's behaviors when it comes to the newest developments all around the world. While some have disadvantages and others have benefits. Similar to those innovations, movies and television have more cons than pros and it also affects greatly on how young people behave. Since movies and television are connected to people's lives these days, it is difficult to have more focus on other things. I strongly agree with the statement that these innovations have more negative consequences than positive on the behavior of young people.
To begin with, movies and television have had a bad impact on youngsters because they manifest actions in movies and also use abusive and inaccurate language, which can be detrimental to young people's minds. A typical example from school would be my son, Josh, who loved watching action movies. But as a parent, I never realized where this would take him until I got complaints about him from his school teacher. His teacher once called me to set up a meeting. She mentioned that Josh was not paying attention in his class and often tend to misbehave and abuse his classmates. Consequently, I started to watch him for 10 days and became aware that his bad behaviors of his were coming from the kind of action movies he was watching. Hence, I became strict with him and did not allow him to watch any type of movie. As a result, he started to become calm and able to keep control of himself.
Furthermore, television is a huge distraction for minors, owing to the fact that they concentrate more on their favorite TV shows rather than focusing on their studies. For instance, a couple of years ago, my little brother got admission into a medical school. He was studious and had never watched any shows. One of his friends told him about popular TV shows and he thought to give it a try. In less than a week, he got addicted to it and never missed any show. And because of that, he started to watch more shows. Therefore, he lost focus from his study and it greatly negatively impact his grades. Thereby, watching TV can be a great interference in one's life and it can halt someone's progress.
In conclusion, movies and television can have more cons than pros on youngsters because they learn bad languages and adopt bad behaviors, also because young people can easily get distracted from television, which can affect their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
... movies and television are connected to peoples lives these days, it is difficult to ha...
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Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ching TV can be a great interference in ones life and it can halt someones progress....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75961538462 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57290156928 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8295229759 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22445140472 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609353318739 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910837217479 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159676257692 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110174986804 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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