do you agree or disagree? people benefit more from traveling in their own countries than traveling to foreign countries?
Since the beginning of the current century, the concept of traveling has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that traveling to foreign countries are more beneficial than traveling in their own country; however, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts in this belief. From a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight, given that traveling to foreign countries could promote people's experience, skills and enjoyment. Below I will strive to explain my supporting point in more detail.
The first and foremost point, provided that people travel outside their own countries, they could amplify their experience. A vivid example that can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above, people in developed countries Such as Canda and The United State are accustomed to spending their vacation outside their countries which could maximize their fundamental knowledge and enhance their intelligible capacity. Furthermore, the world are filled with striking and different cultures; hence, Traveling to foreign countries not only helps people to gain an essential understanding of other cultures; but also, learn them how to accept diverse people. Consequently, explore the world by traveling is crucial.
Next coupled with experience, skills are another benefit of traveling abroad. A recent survey conducted by The University of Toronto found that students who traveled to many foreign countries gained integral skills, which improve their personality. To put it in another way, students who explore the world by traveling could get the chance to deal with a variety of people from different cultures and traditions. Thus they could boot their communication and language skills, which help them to get lovely careers after graduation and pull up their future with thrives and prosperity. Therefore, traveling to foreign countries is significant for people's personalities.
Although the previous reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only reasons available. there is another subtle point must be born in mind. The world is filled with striking and fantastic places. provided that people travel to foreign countries, they will be able to visit and enjoy these places. For instance, every country has special tourist places, such as the Pyramids of Giza in Eygpt, the Great Wall of China and Eiffel Tower in Paris. To that end, had people traveled to plenty of countries, they could not only enjoy their time; but also, broaden their knowledge by visiting many valuable and historic places. As a result, traveling to foreign countries is more engaging.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, people benefits more from traveling to foreign countries and underestimating all these benefits are not logical. It is suggested that schools put more funds to design learning activities that encourage students to explore the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40217391304 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72824874413 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515217391304 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.577505662 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.954545455 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47723085497 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152272645371 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122545680053 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298712826763 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628395321468 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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