Do you agree or disagree that school should reduce art and music class
I totally disagree. Because reducing art and music class may lead negative results to many aspects, contrasting to maintain the proportion appropriate.
At first, let us remind how we expected a minor as we were at a middle school. Too much stress does those successive majors, such as math and physics class, bring to us. From the bottom of my heart I did need these minors to take a break and change a model for my brain. As we all know the switch is truly indispensable if a student wants to study and progress efficiently, according to some survey make by physiologists. Then the school will also gain reputation widespread with remarkable education quality.
Furthermore, taking these classes can help students find and develop their hobbies. When I was a child, I would like to play the piano, because it is awesome to tap the keyboard and then a nice melody will come along. But once I told my mother that I wanted to take a piano lesson, she just ignored and considered which more useful and realistic class could be chosen, such as Olympic competitions. The possibility I might be a great pianist ended there, let alone “dreams”. Then just think about what if schools provided more music classes. Would it be true for the better? If there is some other classes such as painting, would I interest in it and go into it?
All right, just leave it as it was, let us think deeply. Increasing art and music lesson makes some artists, not so much famous or those new comers, get a job. It could easily conjecture schools need a lot more teachers than before with demands of increasing art and music classes. In this way these poor artists could make a living and settled down concentrating on their works. On a national level, not only will the problem of employment be solved a little, but also more brilliant and graceful art work will spring up.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68996960486 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69136879105 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629179331307 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8554391605 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2105263158 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162514158313 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448492274164 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053791514027 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109085697678 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482874183981 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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