Official 40 Task 1
Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible.
The reading passage illustrate three aspects of impossibility of migrating to Venus. Whereas the professor refutes this idea from the passage. To be specific, he believes that floating on the atmosphere of Venus could solve these problems.
First, the reading material mentioned that heavy pressure on Venus would crush everything such as craft and something else brought by humans. But on the floating station, where, for example at an altitude of 50 kilometer, there will be lower pressure than the passage have mentioned above due to a common sense that the higher there is the lower the pressure can be, nothing could be endangered.
Secondly, when it comes to atmosphere, the absence of water and the exceeding quantity of carbon dioxide are easy to balance. Compounds like carbon dioxide, sulfuric acid and so forth could making fresh water. As a result, there is no need to import water to the station.
Finally, thick clouds and carbon dioxide do block sunlight preventing it from reaching the ground. However, the floating station could not only receive most of sunlight penetrating through clouds but also acquire sunlight that was reflected by carbon dioxide at under layer.
So the professor states that it is possible for people’s migration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of impossibility of migrating to Venus. Whereas the professor refutes this idea from th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...where, for example at an altitude of 50 kilometer, there will be lower pressure than the ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...oxide, sulfuric acid and so forth could making fresh water. As a result, there is no n...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1070.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24509803922 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62433968554 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637254901961 0.540411800872 118% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.716519799 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2727272727 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101036856774 0.272083759551 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343389578488 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038266940484 0.0662205650399 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.053093548945 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402163776214 0.0443174109184 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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