A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18)improve their teaching. It is considering two plans: 1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school. 2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually
Last decades have witnessed tremendous advancement in our national education. It is reflected in not only almost all the teenagers at the age from 14 to 18 are enforced to attend compulsory education, but educational skills, equipments and new concepts pop up replacing old-fashion ones, largely improving the quality of schooling. In a word, it is an epoch-making time when unprivileged students could seize opportunity so as to alter their lives. To keep up with this significant and striking transformation, teachers in high school never stop heading toward better teaching capability. However, when it comes to how to help them develop their skills, different people may have divergent viewpoint. Some express their appreciation of training a few teachers at first and then letting them in turn provide that course for others. As far as I am concerned, whereas, I would display my preference to using online material and realizing this studying individually.
Initially, teaching online is more efficient than the former one. Nowadays, teachers are under too much pressure, for example that they have their obligation to prepare the class and amend students’ homework, making it arduous to spending a lot of time taking part in these courses, especially for those excellent teachers who is the most precious resources at educational field. As a result, providing this training with online material could easily solve this puzzle. Every teacher has a personal computer given by high school now. So it is extremely convenient for them to take this class wherever they go and whenever they want, such as the break between two classes with a cup of coffee in hands. And what is more, if they could be trained via the network, numerous effective methods would be exerted such as they will be able to use more multimedia, rendering them to understand and assimilate knowledge impressively.
Admittedly, the traditional way to learn a new approach of teaching is to send a small group of teachers for a lesson and then let them train others when they are back. The reason why people choose this is at that time online courses were not pervasive, preventing good teaching method spreading all around our countries. Personally, people asserting the former one might have not left their comfortable zone. Obviously, hardly could one offer a reasonable and sensible excuse for the former proposal.
Considering what I have discussed above, using online material, I think, is a better choice to apply the course.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ileged students could seize opportunity so as to alter their lives. To keep up with this...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, then, whereas, as to, for example, i think, such as, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87948738127 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611793611794 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.97794712 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225132048862 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059682168629 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506580729457 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112527612444 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575732497046 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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