It is obvoius that education is one of the most imporatant parts of humans’ life. teachers play a crucial role in education and training of children espeacilay teenagers. in order to improve scientific level of students governments should spend time and money to increase knowledge of teachers and to improve their teaching, and it is worth doing it. a city can use different approches for achieving its goal of improving teacher’s teaching. I strongly believe that it is better for cities to provide online materials for teachers to study individually. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think if cities gives an identical opportunity to high school teachers in order to improve their teaching, they will able to meet their objective faster. In other words, if cities wants to select a group of outstanding teachers fr additional training and then these teachers provide this training for others teachers, it will take a lot more time than train all teachers through online materials. For example, when I was a student at high shool, the officilas planned to educate students in computer skills. Thus, they decided to improve the teachers’ skills in this field. They selected only distinguished teachers to train in summer and then they conveyed their information to other teachers in fall, while they intended to teach students computer skills in fall. Therefore, if they provide equal chance for all teachers in summer, they will able to train students in fall and save their time.
Moreover, using online material not only helps cities to reach its aims faster but also gives the same opportunity to all teachers in order to improve their teaching efficinecy. It is possible that excellent teachers miss some important points when they are tranferring the information to other teachers. As a result, using this method may not have suffuicient efficency. It is useful for teachers to have access to the same facilities.
To sum up, in my point of view, using online materail reasults in more profociency of teachers because the fact that all teachers can utilize the same chance and facilities. In addition, it helps cities satisfy their goals faster.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13774104683 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7897591629 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509641873278 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4446844247 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.611111111 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362036565096 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119634777084 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726680455824 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213988271055 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756625502127 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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