As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break: 1、Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study ; 2、Students must volunteer to work in the university' s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why?
The past decade has witnessed tremendous advance of educational standard. It is reflected on not only new educational theories pop up but also increasing numbers of students crowd into universities. Accordingly, stress of both school and students rises. For schools, they begin to abandon the old-fashion educational mode force-feeding students, which is replaced by an overall mode. While students tend to seek and develop their potential beyond their majors. Therefore, some assert that students should take a course without direct connection to their majors. But I disagree. Personally, as a student myself I prefer to work in the city I live in.
Obviously, volunteering to work in the city enables students to learn knowledge that can not be obtained in schools. This knowledge given by practical manufacture or operation in a factory or company may make it possible for them to get accurate judgment, broad horizon and to better manage a real problem elaborately, which further help amend their plans of careers. As a result, they would get an ideal job and perform well in the future. Take my friend Monica, a sophomore in Shandong University of Technology, as an example. She once was assigned to be an assistant in a youth hostel, where she needed to communicate with all manner of customs. To be frank, Monica was so timid that hardly talked to any strangers before this voluntary activity. But now building confidence fortunately, she can convey her feelings bravely and listen to others patiently. She said to me that it is quite surprised that she has realized this potential.
Admittedly, some may assert that taking history at the long break has its merits. To be specific, not only could it avert students from repeating mistakes of past but also could evoke their deep thoughts on current social issues. For example, by getting to know the Second World War, students could deeply understand the importance of peace. Plausible as it sounds that all students should take that history course, the view in reality does not hold water. I appeal to other methods rather than history courses of getting the same effect. For instance, historical books, relevant seminars and documentaries are available options for students who strive to know about the evolution of whole human society. In this way, students immersed in their heavy work could also benefit from this readily. Besides if all students were going to take a history lesson, universities would be burdened by the financial difficulties let along such numbers of renowned professors unavailable.
Taking into account all the factors discussed above, I suppose working in the university' s city or their hometowns better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16210045662 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78492866186 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60502283105 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1354583449 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.44 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.52 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251633477506 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636262241149 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537489694854 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146621931382 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639069225222 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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