The university requires students to undertake one task for their long break. Students could choose from the two selections - taking a course on the subject which has no direct connection to their majors, or doing a volunteer work in their hometown or the in city where the university is located. Some students may argue that the first option is better becasue it is a great opportunity to broaden their horizen. Nevertheless, from my perspective, students could benefit more from the second option.
On the one hand, volunteer work will help students gain a sense of belongingness and deepen the connections between students and the city they are working at. Considering the natural of volunteer work, which is giving assistance without charge and show love and care to other citizens, people who are benefit from students' hard work will show their appriciation and thankness to students. For instance, students who work at shelters could make the lives of homeless people much easier. Aside from that, other citzens will enjoy a cleaner and a safer city with the number of homeless people declean. As a result, students will recive gratfulness from all these people. A understanding that it is them who made the city a better place will make students love the city even more.
On the other hand, volunteering also creat opportunites for students to master about professional knowledege that is highly associated with their major. As there are many different kinds of volunteer work, studends can apply for these that are connected with their majors. For example, finance students could find a volunteer job such as assisting senior citzens to creat their account at a bank, where they could help and learn more about financal institutions at the same time.
Besides, taking a course which has nothing to do with students' major will likely to hinder the success of students' college lives. With limitted time and money, students need to finger out what is the most efficient way to ahcieve their goal. Students generally will taken all possible factors such as their interest, their financial conditions, as well as the pay off for different majors before making their decision on which major to they should take. Paying extra money to learn courses that are not helpful for their career is not rational, letting alone a bad grade will affect their GPA. If students are eager to learn more, there are other method such as watching videos online or read a book instead of taking a course.
In summary, taking volunteer jobs is more benefical for students during a long break since students could not only gain a sense of belongingness of the city, but also could practice their professional skills. Other than that, taking a course that are not a subject of their majors is not time or financial efficient. There are other ways that could help students to learn about other fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...love and care to other citizens, people who are benefit from students hard work will sh...
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Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...cive gratfulness from all these people. A understanding that it is them who made ...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...sociated with their major. As there are many different kinds of volunteer work, studends can a...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'take' or 'be taken'?
Suggestion: take; be taken
...eve their goal. Students generally will taken all possible factors such as their inte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98550724638 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52768969962 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482401656315 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5757968891 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310664560425 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11411562563 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103376785801 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194740885727 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929327003927 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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