Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want.Some people think this can cause bad habits and ideas about money in children. Others think the opposite. What's your opinion?
Forming the concept of money in children's minds is an important process in education. Some people hold that by providing a certain amount of money to kids without asking where it goes, childern could learn about how to manage their property well. Nevertheless, from my perspective, letting children have the freedom to buy whatever they want well do more harm than good as bad habits and ideas about money could come into beings when paretens are conducting such method to educate their springs.
On the one hand, without construction and guildence, children may use the money so improperly that their live could be ruined. Many goods and servirces are not for children and could cause phycalogicaly hurt. For instance, drug could cause server addication and it is difficult for drug users to get clean. Not only could drug damange one's mental and physical health, but also could drug dry up one's fund as it costs a fortune to statisfy one's needs. Meanwhile, drug is also associated with other crimes such as illegal trade and theif. If children choose to use their money for drugs, even a small amount in the begaining, their lives could be totally distoryed. Other goods such as pron movies, guns could be harmful as well. As a rusult, partens should set limmitation on the use of money instead of encourage them to buy whatever they want.
On the other hand, if ample money is provided, children are likely to over-spending which could lead to bad habbits and financial difficulty in the future. Kids at the begining may not understand the notion of money. All they could get is that a certain amount of money will be given to them withouot costs and that money could exchange for things they like. Gradully, children will tend to take it for granted that money will come autamatically to them. They come so easily as all they need to do is ask and wait. They do not need to work hard to get what they want. Instead, they just wait. Without the trouble of earning money, it is unlikely that kids will cherish them. For example, a kid could but an expensive Loge toy without hesitation if money is provided freely for his or her. As a result, kids will tend to grow a habit of over-spending.
In summary, money should not be provided to children as a purporse of education because negative havits and conception of money could form without the guidence of parents. After all, children are with relatively little knowledge and understanding of this world, and the help from their partens are curtial for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... fund as it costs a fortune to statisfy ones needs. Meanwhile, drug is also associat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77397260274 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48609066116 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7651677727 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9130434783 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0434782609 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08695652174 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276635017064 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895233747819 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543038126368 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191276909197 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461777713117 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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