The university requires students to undertake one task for their long break. Students could choose from the two selections - taking a course on the subject which has no direct connection to their majors, or doing volunteer work in their hometown or the in city where the university is located. Some students may argue that the first option is better because it is an excellent opportunity to broaden their horizons. Nevertheless, from my perspective, students could benefit more from the second option.
On the one hand, volunteer work will help students gain a sense of belongingness and deepen the connections between students and the city where they are working. Considering the nature of volunteer work, which is assisting without charge and show love and care to other citizens, people who are benefiting from students' hard work will show their appreciation and thankfulness to students. For instance, students who work at shelters could make the lives of homeless people much more comfortable. Aside from that, other citizens will enjoy a cleaner, and a safer city with the number of homeless people decline. As a result, students will receive gratefulness for their hard work, which in turn strengthened the bond between students and that city.
On the other hand, volunteering also creat opportunities for students to master professional knowledge that is highly associated with their major. As there are many different kinds of volunteer work, students can apply for these jobs that are highly relevant to their majors. For example, finance students could find a volunteer job such as assisting senior citizens in creating their account at a bank, where they could help and learn more about financial institutions at the same time.
Besides, taking a course which has nothing to do with students' major will likely to hinder the success of students' college lives. With limited time and money, students need to finger out what is the most efficient way to achieve their goal. Students generally will take all possible factors such as their interest, their financial conditions, as well as the pay off for different majors before making their decision on which major to they should take. Paying money to learn courses that are not helpful for their career is not rational, letting alone having a lousy grade which will affect their GPA. If students are eager to learn more, there are other methods such as watching videos online or read a book instead of taking a course.
In summary, taking volunteer jobs is more beneficial for students during a long break since students could not only gain a sense of belongingness of the city but also could practice their professional skills. Other than that, taking a course that is not a subject of their majors is not time-efficient as other ways could help students to learn about different fields as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...sociated with their major. As there are many different kinds of volunteer work, students can a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07855626327 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61884975332 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484076433121 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6352406641 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.894736842 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7894736842 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319679250192 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127166721396 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10661406444 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203735348937 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864363676835 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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