Do you agree or disagree Television advertising directed toward young children aged two or five should not be allowed | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree?

Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two or five) should not be allowed.

It is true that television is a great source of entertainment for all age groups. Some people argue that advertisement targeted for toddlers makes them jubilant and euphoric. They cite that cartoons on advertisement makes them laugh and giggling is good for health of children. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that advertisement focus directly to premature children should be banned, and it's disadvantages far more than its advantages. I will support my viewpoint two reasons.

To begin with, television advertising directed towards small kids should be prohibited because massive broadcasted advertisement deceive the public and they want children to buy their products. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. For example, when I was child, one of TV ads where eating chocolates made those two characters in the play robust and they took over the palace by fighting with muscular body more than twenty guards. So, I had believed that it was true during that period. Moreover, huge advertisement promoters the specific brands and they usually exaggerate the quality of information and promulgates the misinformation. For instance, many toys company shows fictional characters in Tv to mesmerize the toddlers, and child want to be same as toys of spider man, bad mans which often causes several mishap. Thus, television advertising should not be expose to immature children.

Furthermore, television advertisement has excessively influenced on eating habits of children. A particular reason for this circumstances is to sell their more stock. For instance, an advertisement of diverse kinds of junk food like Maggie, noodles, KFC, mac Donald's burgers etc. which is not healthy for toddlers. They try to show children to influenced on such ads by deceiving the facts .The television advertising promotes more on such advertisement to attract more children and sell their product as much as possible. Thus, such bogus advertisement should be banned.

To sum up, the issue whether television advertisement focus on children should be allowed or not is complex. Some people suggested that advertisement helps child to make happy and joy because creators and cartoons makes help giggle which may be benefit on their health. Nevertheless, I still contend that premature children (aged two-five ) should not be allowed to watch such ads because they had negative impact on psychology and causes several detrimental health and mental hazards in children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, thus, as to, for example, for instance, it is true, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41645244216 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01673114388 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560411311054 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.265738058 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.333333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332433107459 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101550159533 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964526711243 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214876729233 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445066911574 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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