Do you agree or disagree: “In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.”?
Work is a major part of our lives. This is because people need to work in order to get experience and money. Some workers think they should work fastly regardless of making mistakes. However, I believe working slowly and making sure everything is done in a perfect shape are very essintial in the work world, because in this way fewer mistakes will happen and employees will not lose their job due to making too many mistakes.
To begin with, working rapidly without paying attention to make something wrong may affect other people espicially in sensitive areas such as hospitals. In some hospitals, the number of patients is high and this will make the employees to work under pressure. As a result, the hospitals' staff may ,somtimes, think to increase their working rhythm in order to provide proper patient services, but this wil make them more prone to make mistakes. A well known hospital in my country serves a whole city, where it is loctaed in. In the winter seasons, the flu cases usually increase and the hospital suffers from this issue every year because they receive a high number of patients. Before four years ago, a tragic incidence happend when a nine year old kid died due to allergic shock. After the investegation, it appeared that the hospital pharmacist gave the child an antibiotic without checking whether the boy had alergy or not. The pharmacist excuse was that she was a lone when she dispensed the medication and the number of patient was high and she forced to work fastly.
Moreover, working quickly could lead the employees to lose their job. In fact, some companies are willing that mistakes are something should happen and they give a percentage of mistakes that their staff might do. In contrast, other companies would not. One of my friends worked in a company that specilized in producing computers processors. His job was to make sure that the machines are working correctly. In some day, he was busy with his family and he tried to take a day off, but his manager refused. He thought that he could finish his work in a short amount of time by doing his work fastly and leave early that day. Unfortunately, one of the machines did a mistake which resulted in a disposal of the whole batch, which cost a lot of money and my friend lost his job. As you can see, if my friend had worked conscientiously, he would not have fired from his job.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the statment in the question because working rashly could lead to bad concequences like affecting other people and workers might lose their job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...re. As a result, the hospitals staff may ,somtimes, think to increase their workin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, as to, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73883928571 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49904218737 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4411325333 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221218831392 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694708543961 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602515065373 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133833969096 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726934843067 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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