A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child`s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
Childhood is an important time for all human beings. This is because their entire lives will change either in a good or a bad way. I believe children's development could be enhanced if they use to read books during their childhood. For this reason, I would give a book to a child to help him or her to develop.
In the first place, books, especially children's books, contain stories and these characters, and children usually fall in love with characters and they want to become like them when they grow up. In other words, if a book is about a story of a teacher who teaches children and takes care of them, some of the children who read this book will dream to become a teacher in the future. When I was a child, I was not interested in books, but my brother was. He used to read books whenever he had free time, and he was interested in stories which were about doctors or hospitals. Additionally, he liked to watch a cartoon show which also was about the medical field. Consequently, when he grew up, he put a plan to join a medical school and be a doctor. Eventually, he became a doctor three years ago and now he is completing his higher degree in neurosurgery sciences. As you can see, if my brother had not read medical stories books, he would not be a doctor right now.
Secondly, when children use to read many books, they will be addicted to them in their entire lives. To be more specific, most of the people who read books a lot, they have started to read books since they were young. For this reason, these people have knowledge of many subjects which make them special among others. Moreover, they have more opportunity to have a job because they could do more than one job’s task. For instance, one of my friends who loves books and he used to read many books when we were at university. Currently, he has three jobs and he gets paid by three different companies. In fact, his major is computer technology and he works as an information technology manager in the day time. During evening time, he works online and teaches people marketing basics. Also, during weekends, he works as an English teacher online.
In conclusion, by providing the reasons and examples in the previous paragraphs, I think the perfect gift for children is a book and it does not matter what this book is about because the most important thing is to make a child love to read books. As a result, the children will determine their areas of interest are and will have more chances than others to have a job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49234135667 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46716923732 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477024070022 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5555238662 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2608695652 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8695652174 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0880735171067 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320363586718 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535833358016 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076300040066 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455444739125 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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