Do you agree or disagree "we should pay attention to the opinions of famous people"?

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Do you agree or disagree "we should pay attention to the opinions of famous people"?

Some people think that famous people have an extraordinary life and know everything, so they believe that it is better to follow what famous people do and pay attention to their opinions. However, others think that famous people are like ordinary people and they may do not have enough knowledge about everything. I believe that it is better to pay attention to the expert's opinions because they have enough knowledge and they may lie in order to earn money.
Most of the famous people work for money, so they may contribute to some advertisers and recommend something that is not really good. Well-known individuals are very popular in each society; some companies and businessmen use this fact for introducing their products or their opinions to the people; the famous people may not really satisfy with that product or agree with that opinion, but for earning more money, he or she will cooperate with that company. For instance, they may advertise a shampoo and display his hair, whereas he had never used it before. Therefore, they may unwillingly lie about some special things.
Another point is that most of the famous people even do not have university educations, therefore they are not an expert and do not have knowledge about everything. Usually people advise and state their opinions about anything without knowledge; for example, they speak about politics, sports, and so on, without having professional knowledge; some celebrities and famous people are like these people and state their opinions about everything. Therefore, we should search for professional expert's opinions and study ourselves, then decide about our opinions.
Famous people are very popular, but they are not an expert and do not have knowledge about everything; it is for us to pay attention to the expert people's opinion and do not trust to the famous ones. Famous people may do something that is not moral or says something that is not reliable in order to earn more money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
...s people have an extraordinary life and know everything, so they believe that it is ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 148, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...s for us to pay attention to the expert peoples opinion and do not trust to the famous ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03374233129 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56986571505 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435582822086 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0949894237 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.75 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251133196501 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115951515488 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794776871478 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190420649912 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717267369607 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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