Do you agreee or disagree with the following statements?Is it more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a weak for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
In the preceding decades, jobs have turned into unseparated part of people's lives owing to its pivotal role in the prosperity of individuals. The ever-increasing attempts to ideal career have aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether it is more enjoyable to have jobs which require working excessive hours but for few days a week or jobs which require working few hours with one or two days off in the week. Although many people adhere to the idea that working for long hours in order to have more days off is ideal, I resolutely possess the conviction that it is better to work for shorter hours. In the following paragraphs, the most outstanding reasons will be explicated.
The first reason that supports my perspective is concerned with the fact that by working a few hours a day, the employee's work performance increase. In fact, companies which their staffs work fewer hours a day, face with a boost in productivity since their worker’s performance increases. Therefore, they can provide more job benefits for their staffs. On the other hand, job and life satisfaction of employees rise on all level, Not only at home but also as work. Take a personal experience as an example, I was working for a company which had decided to reduce the working time, after a while, the managers understood despite the reduced hours, the workers were more productive and happier. Had the managers not reduced the working time, the employees would not have been able to work much more effectively.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that working for a few hours let the employee exploit hobbies and activities. Indeed, they have the time to refresh or pursue their other dreams beyond the workplace. They also can spend more time with their families which make this opportunity for them to manage their life-balance. For instance, mothers who work can be with their children every day beside their job duties.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that working shorter hours a day provide a better life balance for the employee since it gives them the chance to increase their work performance and work accurately as well as being with their family or following their another dream.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in brief, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98138297872 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7560571077 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515957446809 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.6633961507 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.866666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358966500627 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136073811187 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816792600124 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243174306389 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869281812545 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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