Do you think that television programs, movies, and video games influence young people’s behavior?Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Rising children is considered a challenging task for most parents. Nowadays, most of them are busy at work and they do not have enough time to stay with their kids. Personally, I think whenever parents have free time, they have to spend it playing games with their children. I feel this way for a couple of reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, when parents have fun with their young, they would make the relationship between them and their kids much stronger. Most kids become open and share their thoughts with people who have the same interest. Therefore, when the father plays with his boy, he will know him well and they will share some secrets. For example, my nephew Mohammed used to play video games after school and during the weekends. His father has a very busy schedule, so he does not see him during weekdays. But at the weekend, his father spends most of his time playing with Mohammed Fort Night which is his most favorite game. When they play together, Mohammed used to feel that he is playing with one of his friends. As a result, he used to chat with his father about what he did in school and after classes. Ironically, he told him about his smoking habit because he felt at that time his father is the most attached person to him.
Adding to the previous point, when parents have fun with their children, they will have the chance to advise them and correct their mistakes. They will have the time to experience their kid’s behavior. For instance, when Mohammed’s father played with him Fort Night, he noticed some bad words coming from Mohammed’s mouth such as the F word. Thus, he directly told him not to say that to anyone. Instead of that, his dad told him to be polite with everyone even when playing games. So, Mohammed bad habit was corrected by his father.
In conclusion, I encourage parents to spend their free time playing with their kids. This is not only because they will strengthen the family relationship, but also, they will teach their kids some important aspects of their life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67123287671 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34147379462 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495890410959 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1333881419 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.1904761905 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0528183665933 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0217482459208 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290564019318 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0327136770104 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191330378644 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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