Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the teachers and parents most of the time have some difficalty with children because of over using from the electronic divices. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that this veiw is not true because suing from this electronic dvice have a lot of benefits to incresing children knowledge and it is helpful for their study. I, to agreat extent agree with this idea that educating children is a more difficult task than it was in the past.
First and foremost, most of the students using from this divce in the classroom. Most of the teachers are unsatisfy because in contrast to schools police all of children have cell phone in the school. They believes that the student do not have a mature ability of make decision in reasonable shape because of their special age condition. Thus, students used from their electronic dvice in the classroom, For example, downloal musice or films and chat with their friends. It is led to they have not enough consentration to the teachers lecture and also, it is distracted other students who want to listen to the teacher speech. Unfortunately, this condition even distracted teacher and affected on their teaching quality.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the cosideration is that throught this dvice student have access to internet space and also some content that it is not suit from their age. children can access to some harmful and in contrast with ethics, it content can have very harmfull effect on their mind. In addition most of the computer games have very violent sujects and it can be l;ed to estention of wildly behavior between students. For example, in th elast month I read an articul in the newspaper about a student that kill a lot of other children in the school. We know that this kid of happens increased in the reacent years.
Finally, it is clear that these device are one of important portion of our modern world and anypne cannot removed these device from the adult or even children life. it is make the task of teachers and parents more difficult because they have big responsibility for toght to the children and inform them about the correct way of using from this device. brcause, surely, the electronic device provide a huge number of benefites for poeple. Therefore, it is strong task for education managers and social managers and parents to have effective plan for teaching children and provideing safe especially internet space for children used.
on the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am coinvinced that eduating children when they have used from electronic divice is more difficult task. becuase, they have not enough knowledge about correct used of this divice and some harmful information that they learn from internet or some games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'believe'
Suggestion: believe
...ren have cell phone in the school. They believes that the student do not have a mature a...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...ent that it is not suit from their age. children can access to some harmful and in contr...
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Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... very harmfull effect on their mind. In addition most of the computer games have very vi...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...appens increased in the reacent years. on the basis of reasons that mentioned abo...
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Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Becuase
...ectronic divice is more difficult task. becuase, they have not enough knowledge about c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85752688172 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49172958517 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489247311828 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5490251984 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.9375 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136183409966 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538142917332 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761934082919 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975297594032 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615893884249 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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