Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that offering unusual and out of law money to schools not only is out of ethics but also led to damage in educational quality of schools in a long time. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that proposing money to the schools work as a motivation factor for school managers and teachers for higher and hard attempts for improving the quality of education and more precise attention to the students. I, to a great extent, disagree with this idea that offering money to the schools for the higher grade or any other aims is a good idea.
First and foremost, surely, all of the parents have not ability or interest to pay this money to the schools some this happens to create the difference between students who pay extra money to the school and who do not pay this money. Because it is possible that teachers and school staff have some different behavior or extra educational program just for students that their parents pay money. This work certainly threatened the educational justice for students because all of them should have equal time and practice in the school.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that this kind of works (pay money) can increase the possibility of crime in the schools because create a way for parents who want their children getting the good grade in the school under each condition to guarantee the success of their children future. For example, a school manager who is not very persis to laws take money for ensuring parents for a good grade even through cheating.
Finally, yet importantly, if this work becomes extended to all of the schools this condition provide serious pressure on parents who have not enough funding to support this money to the schools and it can be a big threaten for social justice of our children. Because of our educational system based on the goal of free education for all of the people and providing the opportunity of success for all of the children in the society separate from their wealthy. In the end, I think this work in the long term can be decreased future development of our society by doing jobs by crazy and not talented people.
On the bases of the reason that mentioned above, I am convinced that offering money to the schools for good grad is a huge mistake because of the decrease in educational justice and rising the possibility of crime and out of law working and also destructive a lot of talented students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, still, for example, i think, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76291079812 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50122520618 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467136150235 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6056884174 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.083333333 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415874041505 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178755042837 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072319706316 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246503075662 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703483600413 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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