I utterlly agree with the concept that students these days are spending more time on their cell phones, online games and social networks and it is gettting harder fro parents to motivate their kids to study. I believe this way because of the increasing amount of disteraction made by technology, the reduction of the brain function and the inevitable distructive effects that the cell phones or other technological products have on the kids.
First I think that, although the technology has brought more comfort and convenience to our lives, the excessive utiliziation of it is some thing that has no good for us specially students. The very main goal of the social networks take Face book as an example was to apeal the tremendous population of the students to use it and become more and more adicted to it. And unfortunately, by the expansion of these networks all around the world and the natural tendency of the teenagers to imitate and keep up with the world they are spending morea nd more time on it these days.
Furthermore, it is wiedly known that using cell phones or watcing TV and movies wxcessivlt makes the brain less functional. The scienctist have officialy annonced that TV programs makes the brain less functional and by time passing by the norons- brain cells- destroy their conecting ways with other norons that haven't been used for so long. Thus the short term infact of to much exploitation of technology are reduction of the innovation, imagination and more tired brain but it is the long term inpact that makes the worries of the scientists, parents and govermental men rise about youngsters.
At last, the containing of the content of the online games which has become one of the important part of the virtually most of the teenagers are questionable. The online games have strong influence on children and have made the young generation more agressive. The increasing tendency toward aggrassion and diminishing intrests for healthy hobbies like reading or other activities such as spending time on school projects amoung jouveniers have made their parents' lives more challenging. The more studnets play online games and spend time one them the more they become intrested on them.
In conclusion, the expansion in technology has brought some concerning issues to the parents. Their distraction, highly disasterouse influence ofthem on students' brains as well as lack of any moral concepts on them have made the background of the reduction in amount of the time, energy and the students used to have on their educational purposes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, so, thus, well, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02117647059 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75125539134 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508235294118 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3291173298 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.428571429 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3571428571 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200277400884 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689887456431 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448457834488 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106995148224 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490748604431 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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