The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Do you agree or dis agree with the statement? use specific example and details to explain your reasons.
Family can be divided into close and extended family. Close family includes spouse, parents and siblings; whereas an extended family includes in-laws, uncles, aunts, cousins and so on. However, there are many forms that a family can take. Some people think their friends as family, others consider their neighbors as family. All these forms are true. However, the matter of truth is that people who consider each other a family must love and take care of each other. I agree with the statement that nowadays extended family has become less important than it was before. I will elaborate my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, with new technology, the gap between old and new generation has been ever widen. For example, young generation like to stay in contact through social media. They communicate with their friends and other people through Facebook, Snap-chat, Whats App, and so forth. In addition, they consider social media more exciting and important than talking to their extended family. Further, people have become busier in their life. They do not have time to talk or meet extended family. Adults are busy in making money to fulfill their family needs. On other hand, students are busy in their education. Due to competition students take numerous classes to be successful in their academics. Because of busy schedules of adults, significance of the extended has been reduced.
Secondly, families are becoming farther apart. People started moving out of their hometown for the better opportunities of job, education, and many more. For example, I moved to the other state for earning a degree of physical therapy. And now, I moved to the USA for better life and job opportunity to work as a physical therapist. Due to super busy schedule, I have only little time to talk to my parents on the phone. In addition, some other family members even in the US live really far so that I rarely get chance to talk or meet them.
Let’s put in a nutshell, I believe that extended family has become less significant because of the other values and factors come into place. People have less time to talk and to spend together with their extended family. Because of all these reasons, extended families have separated from the rest of the family compare to the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94270833333 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43971920878 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513020833333 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6580521079 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.2962962963 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2222222222 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167878357317 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488791404361 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773836991339 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11059295256 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621298455139 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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