Is extended family important or not

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Is extended family important or not?

Are extended famaily members not essential in people's lives todays? This is a controversial issue. Some people think that not close family members such as grandparents, cousins, anunts and uncles are significant because they conceted to each others with blood relationships. Although I understand their point of view, I wholeheartedly believe that extened family is less valuable than it used to be for several reasons.

One of the reasons why some extended family members relationships become less important is becuase families live far away from each others. Years ago, people who related lived close to each others. However, today's life is compeltely different than the previous ear. People today move around looking for better live. Therefore, they are likley to relocate far away from where their relative live, and sometimes even travale to new countries. Let's say there is a family contain of father, mother and two children. This family lived in a countryside where its extended family is. However, the man decided to move out because he finds a better opportunity for work overseases. Thus, children eventually will start to forget their cousins and anuts and other family members becuase they will grow away from them. Even though the two kids contact their family by using technology, they are sitll to not have good memories and connections with them. For this reason, living ferther away from family members makes their realationship weak.

Another reason for redusing the necessatiy of the extended family is that people are busier with life. People today have a lot to do every single day. So in order for them to reduce their stress is to finsh all tasks that asign for each day especially the important onse such as doctor appointments, meeting with coworker for job, or finish an homework for school. Resarch has been done on 100 families about their extended family relationships strength. 70% for the participant stated that they did not have enough time to spend or visit them. So that data shows people are more overwhelmed with recent live style. If people did not required to multiple tasks, they would probably have enough time to connect with family members and create memories with them. Alhtough people still can try hard to make extended family relationship be more valuable, that will creat another issue in their lives because they need to delay some of their important tasks. Because of this, todys' lifestyle played an important role in decreasing the connection between blood-related family.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1432038835 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55269080057 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565533980583 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9305041761 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2916666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31465722205 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993336213946 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118545000892 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229639089318 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558883087423 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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