By and large, a variety of notions have been presented in terms of the extended family by general public. In this regard, it is alleged that the significance of these types of families has diminished these days in comparison with the past. While a few individuals cast doubt on this statement, I personally agree with this thesis due to several reasons, two of which are globalization and novel lifestyles.
In general, nowadays, the extensive families with a large number of members is less essential as opposed to the past. The most significant reason which should be taken into account is the globalization. As a rule, with developing the technology in all over the world, persons are inclined to progress in the entire aspects of their lives such as their career, education and etc. On the other hand, they tend to attain novel opportunities and great chances for improving. Therefore, the statistics of immigration to advanced countries, cities and states has increased dramatically. As a result, nearly the entire individuals migrate and live far away from their parents, grandparents, uncles, aunts and etc. Hence, everyone gets benefit from a highly small family. For example, six years ago I immigrated to the Europe after my university. That is because, I really wanted to develop in my major and also find an appropriate job. Thus, I separated from my large family owing to my desires. Now, I have a family with only three members.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that general population's life style has altered noticeably. Obviously, in this era, persons' tendency towards numerous and modern requirements has promoted. In addition, the life style of everyone in different branches like housing, nourishing and etc. has modified. Consequently, for affording these sorts of demands, a large amount of money is required. Every member of family should work hardly to obtain cash. On the contrary, one person cannot provide money for every members of an enormous family. Then, individuals do not have a tendency to live together. For instance, although my husband and I work for long hours, we are faced with varieties of challenges to supply our primitive needs and our child's welfare. I can envision how difficult it is to live in a family with a number of styles, principles and demands.
All in all, whether the extended family is less important now than it was in the past has become huge concern among persons. In this case, I assert that the wide family is not crucial now owing to both trend towards globalization and sundry lifestyles.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...nted in terms of the extended family by general public. In this regard, it is alleged that the...
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Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
..., nowadays, the extensive families with a large number of members is less essential as opposed to...
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Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...r lives such as their career, education and etc. On the other hand, they tend to attain ...
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Line 3, column 699, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ir parents, grandparents, uncles, aunts and etc. Hence, everyone gets benefit from a hig...
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Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'populations'' or 'population's'?
Suggestion: populations'; population's
...eserves some words here is that general populations life style has altered noticeably. Obvi...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...erent branches like housing, nourishing and etc. has modified. Consequently, for affordi...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'work'.
Suggestion: hardly work
...required. Every member of family should work hardly to obtain cash. On the contrary, one pe...
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Line 5, column 715, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'supplying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: supplying
... are faced with varieties of challenges to supply our primitive needs and our childs welf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in general, such as, as a result, by and large, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03037383178 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80894668103 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567757009346 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0774217968 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.12 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.12 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229463176322 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533326944078 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110865072992 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17574688167 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170384929326 0.0645574589148 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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